Sunday, December 5, 2010

Swept Away (a poem)

Swept Away

©Louise Gallagher


Your breath whispers
a thousand promises
swept away

my body
awakens

where your touch
measures

my pulse

pounding
passion
rises

I melt

my heart
beating
madly
against
your mouth
consuming me
laying bare
my secrets
revealed
in shadowy light

your lips
peel back

my skin

pulsing
resistance
collapses

I fall

my mind
running
wildly
into
your body
revealing
a thousand promises
breathing
down
my body

I am
swept away.

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It is another One Stop Poetry Sunday hosted by the oh so talented and creative Adam Dustus. Today's photo prompt from self-taught photographer Lisa Michelle Arhontidis is your invitation to create a poem (or Flash Fiction 55) inspired by her photo.

Go on! Give it a go. It's fun and challenging and exciting... and it just might take you out of your comfort zone into that amazing place where wonder begins and anything can happen! Click on over to One Stop Poetry and explore your imagination.
This poem is also linked through to Jingle Poetry's Poetry Potluck -- the theme of which this week is Dreams, Visions and Reveries -- there's some amazing poetry there too!

Enjoy!

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33 comments:

  1. MaureenDecember 5, 2010 at 10:03 AM

    This prompt is inspiring poets to be swept away.

    I particularly like this line: "a thousand promises/breathing/down/ my body".

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  2. dustusDecember 5, 2010 at 10:15 AM

    There's a rhythm to your minimalist lines that sounds great, carries out the whisper introduced in the first line. Love how your poem comes full circle to the title. Excellent challenge entry. Cheers :)

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  3. ClaudiaDecember 5, 2010 at 10:18 AM

    ...and i'm swept away..
    your words are fast paced and flow like a wild river...nice!

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  4. Anita MagdalenaDecember 5, 2010 at 10:41 AM

    Breathtaking imagery, beautiful.

    Anita.

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  5. batsickDecember 5, 2010 at 11:14 AM

    Cool and very dreamlike! Here's mine http://thelunaticsdiary.blogspot.com/2010/12/dreams-are-never-eternal.html

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  6. Helena MalheurDecember 5, 2010 at 11:22 AM

    oooh, I am swept away by your poem! loved it... so beautiful, vivid imagery and creative language --

    "your lips peal back my skin"
    and
    " my mind running wildly into your body"

    gorgeous writing!

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  7. ReflectionsDecember 5, 2010 at 11:37 AM

    Love the rhythm of waters, love, that flow within your imagery... yet feels peaceful to be swept away.

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  8. Desert RoseDecember 5, 2010 at 1:15 PM

    I am swept away..TOO! lovely read..how beautiful this prompt is! so much talented poets..it is really fascinating to read you all..so happy :)

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  9. BeachannyDecember 5, 2010 at 2:10 PM

    Definitely an acting not talking poem--sweeping your reader along in images, emotion and surging movement. Well done. Gay

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  10. FireblossomDecember 5, 2010 at 2:57 PM

    Swept away indeed! I enjoyed this...the short lines give it the feel of urgent passion. Whew. :-)

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  11. GlynnDecember 5, 2010 at 4:12 PM

    I'm rubbing ice cubes on my head. This is - a wow.

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  12. Chris G.December 5, 2010 at 5:20 PM

    Like the form of it, the flow - the utilization of shorter lines and single words heightened the pace, sweeps you right along. Rhythmic passion, with wonderful image capture. Fine work.

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  13. AnonymousDecember 5, 2010 at 5:28 PM

    i think i just melted.
    hot stuff.

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  14. HopeDecember 5, 2010 at 8:38 PM

    hello fellow Albertan!

    love your poem! Imagery is hot!
    Beautiful flow!
    thank you

    thank you for your visit and comment
    take care

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  15. HopeDecember 5, 2010 at 8:49 PM

    hi Louise!

    this is cool

    I'm just outside of Sylvan Lake! :)

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  16. Ramesh SoodDecember 5, 2010 at 8:52 PM

    Well... one can only exclaim....AHA Great write..!!!!!

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  17. AnonymousDecember 5, 2010 at 8:57 PM

    these words have swept me away...sensually sweet

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  18. Louise GallagherDecember 5, 2010 at 8:57 PM

    Hi Hope! We are so close! I have a cousin in Sylvan Lake -- Ed gallagher...

    It's so cool to meet someone here so close.

    Wow!

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  19. KellieDecember 6, 2010 at 5:44 AM

    a yummy read! Thanks for sharing! and i love the name of your blog. i wish i could find my joy again. it seems to have gotten lost lately :(

    Happy Potluck!
    Kellie

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  20. S. EtoleDecember 6, 2010 at 7:36 AM

    Smiling at Glynn's comment and swept away by your writing.

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  21. AnonymousDecember 6, 2010 at 8:29 AM

    great posting. here's mine- http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/15/head/

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  22. AnonymousDecember 6, 2010 at 11:46 AM

    Totally swept away.....WOW!!!!

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  23. HopeDecember 6, 2010 at 3:03 PM

    hi Louise! heard of your name but personally don't know you but you've heard of 6 degrees of separation? I'm sure we must know someone in common. :)
    take care!

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  24. Alegria ImperialDecember 6, 2010 at 10:36 PM

    Swept away! That's how I felt after reading your poem. I love most the last two stanzas. Thanks!

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  25. AnonymousDecember 7, 2010 at 5:24 PM

    A fantastic write - I loved the imagery that surely will keep me warm tonight!

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  26. Shashidhar SharmaDecember 8, 2010 at 4:30 AM

    Dear Louise

    Very soft at the same time raw emotions, powerful and sensuous imagery.. I liked it so much...

    Thanks for sharing...

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Tweet me @VerseEveryDay

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  27. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallDecember 9, 2010 at 10:54 AM

    Glad to have you on week 13,
    see you soon again...

    Award/Treats 4 Poetic Friends of Jingle, Happy Thursday!

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  28. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallDecember 18, 2010 at 7:04 AM

    love the image, the wording is perfect and mind blowing...
    thanks for your contribution..
    Happy Saturday!

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  29. AnonymousDecember 18, 2010 at 8:43 AM

    oh la la!

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  30. AnonymousDecember 18, 2010 at 1:12 PM

    This is really great, the style is perfectly fitting.
    What I like most is that it's romantic and passionate without being obscene, which is a tough line. Well done.

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  31. RoyDecember 18, 2010 at 1:39 PM

    sensual simplicity, like it

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  32. LeiffyVDecember 18, 2010 at 5:18 PM

    Great work, getting lost in the moment and swept up in the passion is what it is all about. Thanks so much for sharing this with us!

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  33. meiroDecember 19, 2010 at 10:18 PM

    nice.

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