Sunday, December 5, 2010

Swept Away (a poem)

Swept Away

©Louise Gallagher

Your breath whispers
a thousand promises
swept away

my body

where your touch

my pulse


I melt

my heart
your mouth
consuming me
laying bare
my secrets
in shadowy light

your lips
peel back

my skin


I fall

my mind
your body
a thousand promises
my body

I am
swept away.


It is another One Stop Poetry Sunday hosted by the oh so talented and creative Adam Dustus. Today's photo prompt from self-taught photographer Lisa Michelle Arhontidis is your invitation to create a poem (or Flash Fiction 55) inspired by her photo.

Go on! Give it a go. It's fun and challenging and exciting... and it just might take you out of your comfort zone into that amazing place where wonder begins and anything can happen! Click on over to One Stop Poetry and explore your imagination.
This poem is also linked through to Jingle Poetry's Poetry Potluck -- the theme of which this week is Dreams, Visions and Reveries -- there's some amazing poetry there too!



Maureen said...

This prompt is inspiring poets to be swept away.

I particularly like this line: "a thousand promises/breathing/down/ my body".

dustus said...

There's a rhythm to your minimalist lines that sounds great, carries out the whisper introduced in the first line. Love how your poem comes full circle to the title. Excellent challenge entry. Cheers :)

Claudia said...

...and i'm swept away..
your words are fast paced and flow like a wild river...nice!

Aquarius63 said...

Breathtaking imagery, beautiful.


Shigune Matsui said...

Cool and very dreamlike! Here's mine

Helena Malheur said...

oooh, I am swept away by your poem! loved it... so beautiful, vivid imagery and creative language --

"your lips peal back my skin"
" my mind running wildly into your body"

gorgeous writing!

Reflections said...

Love the rhythm of waters, love, that flow within your imagery... yet feels peaceful to be swept away.

Desert Rose said...

I am swept away..TOO! lovely beautiful this prompt is! so much talented is really fascinating to read you happy :)

Beachanny said...

Definitely an acting not talking poem--sweeping your reader along in images, emotion and surging movement. Well done. Gay

Fireblossom said...

Swept away indeed! I enjoyed this...the short lines give it the feel of urgent passion. Whew. :-)

Glynn said...

I'm rubbing ice cubes on my head. This is - a wow.

Chris G. said...

Like the form of it, the flow - the utilization of shorter lines and single words heightened the pace, sweeps you right along. Rhythmic passion, with wonderful image capture. Fine work.

nance marie said...

i think i just melted.
hot stuff.

Hope said...

hello fellow Albertan!

love your poem! Imagery is hot!
Beautiful flow!
thank you

thank you for your visit and comment
take care

Hope said...

hi Louise!

this is cool

I'm just outside of Sylvan Lake! :)

Ramesh Sood said...

Well... one can only exclaim....AHA Great write..!!!!!

David Waters said...

these words have swept me away...sensually sweet

M.L. Gallagher said...

Hi Hope! We are so close! I have a cousin in Sylvan Lake -- Ed gallagher...

It's so cool to meet someone here so close.


Kellie said...

a yummy read! Thanks for sharing! and i love the name of your blog. i wish i could find my joy again. it seems to have gotten lost lately :(

Happy Potluck!

S. Etole said...

Smiling at Glynn's comment and swept away by your writing.

fiveloaf said...

great posting. here's mine-

Anonymous said...

Totally swept away.....WOW!!!!

Hope said...

hi Louise! heard of your name but personally don't know you but you've heard of 6 degrees of separation? I'm sure we must know someone in common. :)
take care!

Alegria Imperial said...

Swept away! That's how I felt after reading your poem. I love most the last two stanzas. Thanks!

abthomas said...

A fantastic write - I loved the imagery that surely will keep me warm tonight!

Shashi said...

Dear Louise

Very soft at the same time raw emotions, powerful and sensuous imagery.. I liked it so much...

Thanks for sharing...

ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Jingle said...

Glad to have you on week 13,
see you soon again...

Award/Treats 4 Poetic Friends of Jingle, Happy Thursday!

Jingle said...

love the image, the wording is perfect and mind blowing...
thanks for your contribution..
Happy Saturday!

Glory said...

oh la la!

thegoiter said...

This is really great, the style is perfectly fitting.
What I like most is that it's romantic and passionate without being obscene, which is a tough line. Well done.

Roy said...

sensual simplicity, like it

LeiffyV said...

Great work, getting lost in the moment and swept up in the passion is what it is all about. Thanks so much for sharing this with us!

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